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The Lucienne Twins
The Lucienne Twins is my first journal entry concerning events of both a supernatural and sinister nature. This haunting tale involves a young teacher, Mary Watkins, and her struggle to help Abigail, one of her students, cope with her twin sister's tragic death. But when mysterious occurrences plague Abigail's life, Mary discovers that perhaps the twin sister is not entirely dead and has not left this world.
9,300 words, or approximately 37 pages.
9,300 words, or approximately 37 pages.
36 pages, Short story
First published April 22, 2014
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Leo Petracci
23 books92 followersLeonard Petracci is a recent graduate of Georgia Institute of Technology currently living in Los Angeles. In his spare time you can find him hiking, at the beach, or enjoying the outdoors.
Feel free to direct any questions or comments to his reddit account, LeoDuhVinci, or his gmail, [email protected]
Visit his blog at https://www.leonardpetracci.com
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April 28, 2014
This is a new writer and quite a worthy first endeavor. This fiction is more suspenseful than I expected as the plot moves along at a good pace. The characters are engaging and the supernatural elements intriguing. I received a free copy of this short story for review purposes.
May 1, 2014
I first read this story on Reddit and then downloaded the Kindle version. This is a short, but very creepy read. Once I started reading, I couldn't stop.
August 12, 2015
Single short story. Interesting plot, not particularly well written though.
March 10, 2017
I love supernatural stories and this one didn't disappoint. As soon as I started reading this book I couldn't put it down. A very creepy, haunting short story. Gave me chills.
November 25, 2017
First, a disclaimer. I am a graduate of Georgia Tech, just like Leonard Petracci (albeit quite a few years earlier), which is the main reason I decided to download and read his story, "The Lucienne Twins." In my day, Tech was better known for training engineers rather than creative writers. Something may have changed in the intervening years, however, since Petracci has definitely learned the calculus of creating a very chilling ghost story.
"The Lucienne Twins" is the story of two kindergarten-aged twins, Abigail and Bridget. Or, at least there are two twins for the first couple of pages of the story, until Bridget is burned to death and Abigail badly injured trying to rescue her. When Abigail finally returns to school a few months later, her teacher (and the story's narrator), Mary Watkins, notices that Abigail's behavior has changed in a number of ways. She seems closer to her deceased sister Bridget than she ever was before, and she seems to have an affinity for recognizing emotions associated with various inanimate objects.
It’s not giving too much away here to reveal that, although Bridget is dead, she’s far from gone, and that she and her sister have a definite paranormal connection. But the full extent of the connection between the sisters doesn’t become clear until the last few pages of the story. Since “The Lucienne Twins” is only about 30-35 pages long, the author has to show his cards fairly quickly. What he does reveal probably won’t come as a great surprise, although the exact nature of the manifestations in this story is rather complicated. But what makes the story quite creepy is the rather proper style in which Mary narrates the story. She doesn’t go into panic mode right off the bat, but instead shows the solicitous concern of a teacher for a troubled student. Then, as the story progresses, she gets drawn in more deeply as she gets more attached to Abigail.
“The Lucienne Twins” is a story that probably would have worked better at a somewhat longer length. As it is, the bizarre events Mary narrates spiral out of control perhaps a bit too quickly, thus losing the element of slowly mounting dread that makes the best stories of this nature so effective. One event in particular stands out, a birthday party Mary throws for Abigail, one where she soon learns that the only students attending will be the ones who were especially spiteful toward the girl earlier in the story. Author Petracci handles the reveal of exactly what happens to these children rather well (hint: it’s not good), but the scene isn’t as ghoulish as it could have been.
For the most part, however, “The Lucienne Twins” is a highly effective story that puts some imaginative new twists on a very familiar theme. The exact nature of the relationship between Abigail and Bridget, is more complex than I would have guessed at first, and the story managed to surprise me a bit. In addition, although I rarely comment on the cover art of a Kindle book, the illustration on the cover of this e-book is the most striking I can remember seeing, a graphic that calls to mind Edward Munch’s The Scream, and which definitely sets the mood for the macabre content of the story. With that cover art accompanying a well-written story, readers get two for the price of one, quite fitting for a horror story about a pair of twins.
"The Lucienne Twins" is the story of two kindergarten-aged twins, Abigail and Bridget. Or, at least there are two twins for the first couple of pages of the story, until Bridget is burned to death and Abigail badly injured trying to rescue her. When Abigail finally returns to school a few months later, her teacher (and the story's narrator), Mary Watkins, notices that Abigail's behavior has changed in a number of ways. She seems closer to her deceased sister Bridget than she ever was before, and she seems to have an affinity for recognizing emotions associated with various inanimate objects.
It’s not giving too much away here to reveal that, although Bridget is dead, she’s far from gone, and that she and her sister have a definite paranormal connection. But the full extent of the connection between the sisters doesn’t become clear until the last few pages of the story. Since “The Lucienne Twins” is only about 30-35 pages long, the author has to show his cards fairly quickly. What he does reveal probably won’t come as a great surprise, although the exact nature of the manifestations in this story is rather complicated. But what makes the story quite creepy is the rather proper style in which Mary narrates the story. She doesn’t go into panic mode right off the bat, but instead shows the solicitous concern of a teacher for a troubled student. Then, as the story progresses, she gets drawn in more deeply as she gets more attached to Abigail.
“The Lucienne Twins” is a story that probably would have worked better at a somewhat longer length. As it is, the bizarre events Mary narrates spiral out of control perhaps a bit too quickly, thus losing the element of slowly mounting dread that makes the best stories of this nature so effective. One event in particular stands out, a birthday party Mary throws for Abigail, one where she soon learns that the only students attending will be the ones who were especially spiteful toward the girl earlier in the story. Author Petracci handles the reveal of exactly what happens to these children rather well (hint: it’s not good), but the scene isn’t as ghoulish as it could have been.
For the most part, however, “The Lucienne Twins” is a highly effective story that puts some imaginative new twists on a very familiar theme. The exact nature of the relationship between Abigail and Bridget, is more complex than I would have guessed at first, and the story managed to surprise me a bit. In addition, although I rarely comment on the cover art of a Kindle book, the illustration on the cover of this e-book is the most striking I can remember seeing, a graphic that calls to mind Edward Munch’s The Scream, and which definitely sets the mood for the macabre content of the story. With that cover art accompanying a well-written story, readers get two for the price of one, quite fitting for a horror story about a pair of twins.
June 4, 2019
I’m not going to lie, I expected this book to be bad. I only say that because it was a free Kindle book and (to me) a lot of them are that way. This short story was pretty good though. It was creepy and interesting. I feel kind of bad for Abigail too.
I would recommend this though for anyone looking for a quick read and “scary” story.
I would recommend this though for anyone looking for a quick read and “scary” story.
February 1, 2022
Great story
I watch and read a lot of horror and ghost hauntings.
There are a few spelling errors but overall a great book. No profanity or vulgarity. I love any ghost novel that ties in history
I watch and read a lot of horror and ghost hauntings.
There are a few spelling errors but overall a great book. No profanity or vulgarity. I love any ghost novel that ties in history
August 30, 2022
Found on a free site, i can sum it up in one word..... CREEPY!
Highly recommended, a very scary short read!
Highly recommended, a very scary short read!
May 2, 2015
This book, while have a few grammatical errors was quite a fun read! It delves deeper in character development compared to most short stories and even though the book was short, I felt it was very well done. The story feels like its missing something but it doesn't take away much from the story. There us definitely a creepy factor in this book and while it isn't terrifying, some imagery will leave you feeling disturbed. I recommend this for anyone who wants a short read, but a good horror story.
January 25, 2016
Interesting short story that went by really fast. It was very entertaining about the teacher and two girls. There are some errors but I don't mind at all, I just went along for the ride. I suggest if you read it just take it as it is (as you should with any book).
April 25, 2015
Ihyy
:) riff refracted c.f. Fred and error error message when reading the walking re root of the're 're regret type type yup Yuri under universe episode was just wondering how much I can see it on the difference between you and you can do
:) riff refracted c.f. Fred and error error message when reading the walking re root of the're 're regret type type yup Yuri under universe episode was just wondering how much I can see it on the difference between you and you can do
January 25, 2016
Interesting short story that went by really fast. It was very entertaining about the teacher and two girls. There are some errors but I don't mind at all, I just went along for the ride. I suggest if you read it just take it as it is (as you should with any book).
March 8, 2015
A good creepy story about twins.
April 7, 2015
Interesting
Finished it in one short setting. This story was incredibly interesting. I was glued to my tablet. I'd love to see more of these!
Finished it in one short setting. This story was incredibly interesting. I was glued to my tablet. I'd love to see more of these!
April 30, 2015
Amazing
This book was absolutely wonderful absolutely flawless. I was utterly chilling and beautifully executed I will NEVER forget the lucienne twins
This book was absolutely wonderful absolutely flawless. I was utterly chilling and beautifully executed I will NEVER forget the lucienne twins
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October 7, 2015The cover page of this book is very interesting.i want to read the book until the end
July 13, 2016
Was an average horror story. The plot had potential but the handling was mediocre.
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