✨Arielle (Queen of the stars)✨ on semi-hiatus’s
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(group member since Jan 03, 2024)
✨Arielle (Queen of the stars)✨ on semi-hiatus’s
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Just pm me or let me know here. I after that i will give you more information. Thanks!

Potentially to make it better you could add more descriptive language to show how annoying the main character is with his immortality. Also you might want to change up the way the MC talks because they sort of sound like they live in the present day. I don’t know if that was on purpose or not. Also maybe more descriptive about what things look like.
Overall so far, it’s really good and I am excited to read more!
I also might post a bit of my story later this week!



My name is arielle, i am in highschool, and i love reading writing and doing art. Some of my favorite stories are the kotlc, agggtm, the hunger games, the unwind series, and in deeper waters. It’s so nice to meet all of you, and i hope to chat even more!