The Sword and Laser discussion

I am just starting and making a attempt at story telling, and putting myself out there. Any of you want to read my opening (and it's not long at all) of my first attempt, go here.

All comments good, bad, or indifferent will be greatly appreciated.

http://theghostworks.wordpress.com/20...

I liked it.

thank you very much.

part one is up

I added The Beginning and Chapter 1 to my pocket. Hopefully will get to them this week, just been nutso so far.

sweet, its very short won't take you a second to read :) I have something cool visually to go with it, just waiting on my super talented artist to finish

I am going to get a little further along then do some editing, but I actually caught a error or two rereading it