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message 1: by Ellison (new)

Ellison Blackburn (ellisonblackburn) | 130 comments I have to say "A woman brutalized to breaking point" makes this something I wouldn't care to read, however, all else the blurb is concise and to the point and I like it.


message 2: by Tami (new)

Tami Sinclair (TamiSinclair) | 6 comments Yes, I have to agree with Ellison. The word "brutalized" makes me think of all sorts of things I really don't want to think about.
Could you use another descriptor? Something like: stressed, pressured, brain washed, or manipulated?
Tami


message 3: by Ellison (new)

Ellison Blackburn (ellisonblackburn) | 130 comments Much better!


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