Write, Wrote, Written discussion

I'VE SURVIVED READING PJO WHEN HE TOLD ME TO STOP. I WON'T STOP NOW

I'M GONNA DIEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE



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:D :D :D :D :D :D :D


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but do ya want some CC? (constructive critisism)

(view spoiler)[instead of disliked, I would to hated. It sounds like more of a kid speaking and more of the character... Please don't take this in a bad way, I am only trying to help, I'm not trying to sound bossy or like a know-it-all. (hide spoiler)]


only read that if ya want CC :)

Okay. :)

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:D love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

MORE!!!!

I know what you mean, I barely get any comments on my writing :-(

Don't worry, Alice, people will come around :) I personally think you are an amazing writer, and your ideas are great!

:D Soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo GOOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

#~~~I Give Thee The Waffle Approval.~~~#

*nods solemnly*

Rubyfirewoods12=^.^= wrote: "I know what you mean, I barely get any comments on my writing :-("

Aww :( It's so hard to read everyone's work, though. I guess you've gotta keep in mind everyone wants everyone else to comment on their stuff too.

Ya, true... And also, I'm near the bottom of the page, and not many people want to read ALL THOSE STORIES up to mine... I feeel really bad for Zaynah, she is alphabetically on the bottom of the page :-( Sorry, Zaynah!

Noo! :( Aw, I'll go have a look at some of your stuff now, Zaynah!

Also, this is really good, Ruby! I am SO jealous of the chick in your story- A WHOLE FREAKING LIBRARY?! SO awesome. I would totally faint, too.

Er, actually, this is Alice's story....

Alice! This is amazing! Why did you stop posting??!!

Not true, it has potential!! You can do a lot with this!

And that's totally understandable. :)

:D :D :D

Oooooo...

XD

Hmmm... CC... would you like grammar stuff or just content? Really, there aren't many mistakes at all.

Alrighty then :)

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Honestly, you have a beautiful writing style, and amazing word choice. :)

Message 20: It says "The upstairs floor was three rooms,my moms,mine,and Brook's." It would be "Mom's" rather than "Moms". Unless she has two mothers, in which case it would be "my Moms'".

Message 33: "After eating the sandwich I began to look through the boxes, looking for a few of mine." Just repeated word "look"/"looking". No biggie, only change it if you want to.

Message 20: "The smaller one right,sweetie?"She asked." Instead, "The smaller one, right?" Or "The smaller one, right sweetie?" Depends on how you want it to sound.

Then mostly just how you format quotes.

Like it would be:

"The cat is red," she says.

NOT

"The cat is red." She says.


Alice you are amazingly amazing, I literately had to fine tooth comb and be super picky to have ANYTHING to say about it! :) (hide spoiler)]

:)

AƖιcє[Nobody listens unless you're popular, beautiful, or dead] wrote: "U:

^Duck

Any criticism?"

What?? Duck? XD

Anyway, Julane covered most of it, all I have left to say is keep capitalizing those i's. Otherwise it was awesome!

woah i really like this you're good :)

your welcome

AH SHE GOTTA GIVE IT TO HER SISTER, ISSA NOT GONNA END WELL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!