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Hey. You wanna make character's first or develop them through the story? I honestly don't care.

Character's first please. You can go first

Sure. But I don't think we should go into details.

Full Name: Halloween Hart Creed
Aliases: Taboo
Age: 25

Appearance:


Apparel:

Name: Major Kono Hame Ling
Aliases: Tano
Age: 27
Appearance: http://www.imdb.com/media/rm420936780...
Apparel: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Military...

Why does he have the same alias as her? I mean, it could be interesting, but just wondering.

Sorry wrote something else. Let me change it.

Anne wrote: "Sorry wrote something else. Let me change it."

Kewl, I like him. I'll start this tomorrow then.

Okay

"Never trust anyone and rely on your instincts; Forget the past and let go off your emotions; Exist like a ghost and never linger long in one place; Never let a witness live; Never show weakness." The leader's harsh voice rang through the big hall, full of men and women alike, all dressed in formal black and white clothes. They formed many long lines, their hands stiff by their sides and each of them was as still as a statue. This was it. The final day for graduates of a secret Mortes academy for year '78. But this was not a normal academy, not by any standards. What went on in there, only the graduates and leaders knew, and each trained since their birth to the age of eighteen - when they were finally let into the world. "001," called the Leader Hellion and a small framed girl broke away from one of the lines and ascended the stairs that led to the stage Leader Hellion was standing on. "Your new name is Frederica Montogmery. Now choose your Codename. And choose wisely, for you will carry it for the rest of your life."
"Panther," the girl, now known as Frederica, said.
'What an unfortunate name,' thought a tall girl that stood at the very end of the first line. 'But at leat she chose a good Codename.'

Agent Hellios kept calling on people, giving them fake names and asking for their Codenames. And as the time passed and many Codenames were taken, they also grew more and more ridiculous and the girl kept praying her Codename would not get taken.
"059," called the Leader and, with a deep breath, the girl walked to his side with her head raised high. "059, your new name is Halloween Hart Creed. Choose you Codename now, and choose wisely."
Without hesitation, the girl, now known as Halloween, blurted out, "Taboo." Her codename of choice was not taken after all and that pleased her. She was about to leave, but Hellios grabbed her arm. "Please, applaud for the top student of class '78!" he yelled and Halloween stared at the students as they erupted into applause, but left the stage as soon as they stopped.

~Seven Years Later~

Halloween placed the gun gently under her pillow and made sure the knife was tucked in her left combat boot. As always, she set up an alarm in front of the door to her hotel room that would warn her of anyone approaching.
"Target in sight," she said to the voice recorder as she watched a young soldier through her binoculars from the room window. "Target name: Kono Hame Ling," she continued and then stopped the recorder. That's all they got in their contracts: A target's name and pictures. Never the reason why they should be killed, but though Halloween wondered, she always forced herself not to think about it.

She brought the rifle scope to her eye and aimed it at the soldiers head. With an exhale, she placed a finger on the trigger and got prepared to press it, when she heard beeping and a red light flashed to her left. Intruders.

She ran to her computer and brought up a picture from outside, only to see many soldiers trying to get in unnoticed. Without hesitating for another moment, she dialed a code into the computer 'RED'. A screen was brought up and countdown started. '15 seconds until self-destruct,' it said, '14, 13...'

Halloween ran to her bed and pulled the gun back out, then quickly armed herself with any weapon she could grab. She ran to the window and jumped out, just as the countdown hit zero and the computer exploded, blasting off the door to the room and destroying anything within it.

Halloween shot a grappling hook from her belt and it embedded into the next building's roof. She swung to the wall, her legs bending on impact to prevent any damage to her body.
"Target Assassination Failed," she breathed into the voice recorder before scaling the wall and settling down on the roof.

“I love you, Kono. Be safe, come ba-back to me, okay?” Kono’s mom cried while hugging him. Kono’s dad pats him on the back. “Be safe, son. We’ll see ya soon.” Kono smiles and nods. “Will do pop.” He turns to his mom and hugs her again. “I’ll come back to ya mom, I promise.” He whispers in her ear. He turns and gets on the bus, leaving behind his parents.

“Well, recruits, this is a new life you’re gonna be living. It will be hard not easy!” His commander says in his gruff and loud voice. Kono swallows and takes one more look back at his parents seeing his mom sobbing into his dad’s chest. He takes a deep breath and turns back towards his commander. “Who is Kono Ling?” Kono takes another deep breath as he stands up and salutes his commander. “You will report to General Farris at base D.” Kono nods. “Yes sir!” He sits back down with his heart in his throat. What could General Farris want with him?

As they get to the base Kono is the last one to get off, he breaks off from the group and is the only one to go to base D. He walks with his head held up high he sees General Farris and salutes him. “General, I was told to come here to you.” He says. General Farris salutes him back and he puts his hands by his sides. “Yes, Kono. Walk with me, will ya.” Kono follows Farris to a room in the back of base D. “I looked at your file, Kono; it’s impressive. That is why I am recruiting you for something important. There is a leak in our system, Kono, and we think that it is someone important. If I or any other General looks into it, we would put out entire squad in danger. However if a new Major looks into it, namely you, we think that it will be alright. But my question for you is; are you up for it?” Kono takes in this new information and takes another deep breath. “Yes, sir, I’m up for it, you count on me.” Farris smiles and pats Kono’s shoulder. “Good. I was hoping you would say that.”

~~Seven Year Later~~

Major Kono is addressing his new recruits when he hears the explosion. He turns to look at it and notices someone jumped out the window. “Everyone inside!” He yells as he turns back towards the recruits. He is the last one inside, he sees Farris. “Sir? Is everything alright?” Farris shakes his head “No. We lost a lot of men in that explosion. Did you see anything, Kono?” Farris asks two things in that sentence. Kono nods his head and motions to the door to the office. They walk in the office. “So what’d you find out, Kono?” Kono sighs. “It’s not good, Farris. First thing though, I saw someone jump out the window of the building before the explosion happened. The second you’re not gonna like; I found something when I was on the mission, you might wanna take a look at it.” Kono gets his backpack and gets out a dog tag out. “I got this from the site that you sent me. You’re gonna wanna look at the name.” Farris turns it around and gasps at the name. “This can’t be possible, Kono.” Kono shrugs. “I know sir, but that is what I found.” He sighs again.

After a long talk with General Farris Kono walks out exhausted. He rubs his neck when he gets to his room. He changes into his normal clothes and puts some food into his backpack, he then takes a walk outside the gate to a house where he meets his friend; Tory. “Hey, Tory. How is your mommy doing?” He asks a little girl that is 7 years old. “She’s doing good. She wants to have the baby though, she says she hates having to go bathroom every minute of the day.” Tory shrugs. “Whatever that means.” He laughs. “Is your mom inside?” Tory nods her head and grabs his hand and walks in to the house.

Kono walks into the house and sees that Melanie is stirring some soup. “Hey, Melanie. How are ya doing?” He asks as he takes off his backpack. “I brought you guys some things.” He takes out the food, which contains; carrots, broccoli, some meat, and some corn. He then brings out a Twix’s chocolate bar. “And this is for you, Tory.” He says as he gives her the Twix chocolate bar and Melanie smiles. “You’re spoiling her; you know that right, Kono?” He shrugs. “I know. How are you doing with John gone?” Melanie sits down and cries. “It’s hard, Kono.” She keeps staring into the fire. “I know, Mel. He’ll be back soon.” She nods a little. “But in what shape?” She cries.

After he leaves Melanie and Tory he walks to the beach and sits down in the sand looking out at the ocean. He sighs thinking about his last mission.

((Could you be more detailed please? And could you write in past tense? Also, please don't have cropped sentences. I am sorry if I seem very demanding and bitchy, but I want to enjoy writing this story. And that's how stories are supposed to be written... If you can't meet those requirements, please say so and I will find another writing partner.))

After making sure that no one followed her to the roof, Halloween slowly got up, rubbing her aching back.
"Fuck," she groaned and raised her arms high above her head in an attempt to crack her back. "This is going to hurt like a bitch tomorrow," she muttered to herself before carefully strapping all the weapons to her body, hiding them with a long black leather duster. She made sure to fasten the belt, so the weapons would not reveal themselves as she would walk down the street in search for her target.

Once she was finally ready, she ascended the stairs and entered the street that was full of people, even late at night. Pulling the hood of the duster up, she made her way down the street - and past the hotel her room was in. She could see the soldiers and police swarming the scene, but the room was completely destroyed, and with it all evidence of her even being in it.

With a satisfied smile, she turned around and walked back the way she came from, her hands already fiddling with the device on her wrist that seemed like any other ordinary watch. A holographic image of a man appeared above it, just as she entered a dark side alley and turned her back to the crowded streets.
"Agent Hellion," the girl spoke in a hushed voice. "The assassination has failed. I require a new computer, set of weapons and IDs." For a moment, the agent only stared back at her, shock playing in his dark eyes.
"The assassination... Failed... You?" he asked in total confusion, losing his professional attitude for a moment. But he soon shook his head and cleared his throat. "Seeing as this is your first failed mission, you will receive only the best of equipment. But keep in mind, those who fail often... They disappear. Understand?"
"Yes, sir," the girl replied, trying to sound normal despite the lump that was forming in her throat.
"The equipment will be waiting for you at Rendezvous point Gamma, 600 tomorrow. Hellion out." And with those words, the holographic image disappeared and Halloween leaned against the wall, her head hitting the wall hard, but she paid it no mind. She was too busy thinking about the 'disappearing' part Hellion had mentioned.
"I vow to never fail again," she whispered to herself, just as the first drop of rain hit her face.

((Sorry, and sure... How detailed do you want me to be??))
Kono was staring at the sand in his hand when he felt the first raindrop on his forehead. He sighed and got up stretching his muscles. He cracked his neck and back. He started to walk back to the base. As he was halfway there to the base he was soaked from head to toe. Yet he didn’t hurry, he always loved the feel of rain and enjoyed the fresh scent it gave off. He could see from where he was that there were still people at the explosion. Who was the person who jumped? He thought about it and tried to remember something that could help him to identify the guy.

It was more of like a slide than a jump. He thought about it all through his walk back to the base. What could make someone slide like that to another building? He asked himself. A picture of a grappling hook came to mind and he nodded he turned at an interjection so that he could go to the building right across the house that exploded. He real quick climbed up the side of the building and tried to see if he could see a hole in the side of the building that could have been created by a grappling hook. Because of the rain and also because it was dark he couldn’t see anything so he jumped down bending his knees when he hit the pavement so as not to hurt anything.

Fuck! That was such a waste of time. He sighed but it came out more like a growl. He didn’t know why he was so angry and that frustrated him even more. He needed to hit something to let out this anger of his. He started to run towards the training center of his base. He ignored everyone and just focused on his destination.

He got to the training center sooner than he wanted to. He opened the door and walked over to an unused punching bag and started punching. Everyone stopped what they were doing when Major Kono came into the room, they all saluted but he didn’t see anything. Everyone lowered their salutes but kept staring wondering what was wrong with the Major.

((See, that's much better! You're much more detailed now, all I'm asking now is that you don't use such croppy sentences.))

The water was everywhere around her, blurring her vision and getting into her throat, not allowing any air to pass. Small baby hands, her hands, grabbed for the young woman that sat in the front seat, her eyes closed.
The baby cried and cried, but it only fastened the process of water getting into her lungs.

Suddenly there was a crash and the car window in the front broke. A man's head peered through it and he started to grab the woman, who had just awakened and was struggling to breathe. She shook her head frantically and pointed at the baby in the back and the man grabbed the small bundle, carrying her upwards and leaving the woman to die...

Halloween awoke with a gasp. For a moment she just sat there, all wet, thinking what had just happened. It took her a few moments to realize that it was just a dream. No, not a dream, a memory rather. Her earliest memory.

With a loud sigh, she picked herself up from the wet and cold alley ground and started down the street again, but it was now surprisingly empty.

Kono didn’t stop hitting the bag even when his knuckles started to crack and bleed. At about midnight he was the last one in the training center. He sighed and sat down panting he shook his head and stood up. He rubbed his neck and looked at his watch. His watch showed it was 12:26 he threw one last punch at the bag and left it swinging as he walked out.

He stepped out into a light rain he lifted his head up towards the sky feeling the rain on his skin. I should take a shower and go to bed but, I just don’t want to, yet. So instead of walking to his room he took another walk. As he turned a corner he bumped into a person in a black duster. “Woah, sorry. Didn’t see ya there.” He said as he helped to steady the person. He then stood to his full height not because of his pride but because it was what he was used to now. He stood a lot taller than the person he bumped into.

He didn’t really know what to do as the person didn’t say anything to his apology so he just moved around them and started to walk. He didn’t bother to look back knowing that the person was staring at him because he could feel it.

I'm sorry, but I can't write with you. Yep, I seem like a bitch, which I am, but it's the truth. You're not using proper punctuation and that bothers me immensely. And just a piece of advice, never control others' characters, like you just did with mine now, unless they give you permission. It pisses people off.

That's fine.... do you mind if I use your idea though with someone else?

Yes I do mind because I want to write it with someone else. So don't use it, but thank you for asking me and not just using it without permission.

Alright but the rp will be different than yours.... but if you say no I will respect that.

Yeah, I'm saying no. I mean, it is my original idea and any kind of copying it is basically just stealing... Thank you for respecting my answer.

You said you would respect my answer, and yet you went off and copied my original story, only changed the character's roles and made her not a hitwoman anymore. So thank you, for respecting my answer. (You're a thief. I told you this here in hopes that you would take the story off, because it is my idea, when I could've just told anyone on the request thread that you were a thief.

Also, you completely copied my story presentation idea. The spoilers, bold titles and crossed ones? My idea.

Wow, are you fucking kidding me?! I saw that you replied in the other topic, stop ignoring me. You either take that story down or I am going to tell everyone that you are a disrespectful thief and I will report you.

You know, it's not your story. I made it up based on yours! Yes I used a soldier but not a hitwomen and it is not the same story line! So... No I will NOT take it down. Also I don't appreciate your language.

And basing it off my story means YOU COPIED IT. How are you not ashamed? I even told you that I do not allow you to do that and yet you still went ahead and did it. Wow. Good job, unoriginal thief with no imagination of your own.

I DID NOT COPY IT!!!!! I liked the idea so I based it off of yours not copied. Get a thesaurus and look up the words copy and based. They're different!

And yet, it means that you used my idea in the process of making yours, which I do not like because it was my original idea. All you changed is that she is not a hitwoman and the soldier is the one who got the assignment. Everything else is the same. So bravo, for your originality.

Look, I am sorry I said those things, but I cannot stand others copying my ideas or basing their stories on my original idea. So please, I'll ask one last time before I report you - take it down.

Whatever.