#rph discussion

To address your concerns~

1. Your banner - maybe mixing up fonts could relieve the "tackiness" you see? Obviously, you can't just mix and match any font you want; they have to complement and contrast in a way that doesn't look tacky. But if I were re-doing the name banner (and this is just me), I'd have a less typewriter font for the name and info, and have the song lyric be in a slightly more cursive/loopy/flowy font, to mix it up and add some depth and contrast. The colors are nice tho, and I love the pictures. ^-^

2. I think the content sounds fine. You've covered your basics and given her lots of room to grow. Or is writing style that's bothering you? When I make characters really fast, I don't always like what I've written b/c I feel like I was rushing and it sounds forced, maybe that happens to you too?

rin to the rescue again, amirite

Just one thing about the template, the name banner is slightly off compared to the pics. :3

I think the third paragraph seems a little out of place? I know that's supposed to be her background, but it feels a little forced and idk I can't put it into words? It just feels off compared to the rest of it? The writing style is very factual for this one, but I think it fits how you're describing Hadley. There's also the one sentence that uses first person at the very beginning but maybe this is my essay writing trickling into my creative writing gdi.

   With sun-kissed blonde hair, and ocean
blue eyes Shannel is easily seen as a pure
angel. Oftentimes she is seen in feminine
attire, gracefully walking with a coy smile
upon her rich, fair skin. First impressions
of her are usually correct in certain aspect.
She's the type of noble girl who's had it all
her entire life, never once having to suffer.
Her parents gave her anything she desired,
as they were nobles with plenty of wealth to
                             spare.

〘１８ ＦＥＭＡＬＥ ＣＯＮＴＥＳＴＡＮＴ〙

                                                                                       Even though she has it all, Shannel is very
                                                                                   easily threatened. She detests the thought of
                                                                                   anyone being better than her at anything and
                                                                                   will murder anyone in her path. Vindictive, as
                                                                                   well as cunning, she'll hurt and (emotionally)
                                                                                   abuse whomever she needs to, in order to get
                                                                                   to the top. She posses qualities of a sociopath,
                                                                                   often lying and putting on a facade or being a
                                                                                   controlling female no longer able to show true
                                                                                   emotions. Shannel enters every situation with
                                                                                   a controlling thumb, placing her ideas above
                                                                                   anyone elses. She rarely lets anyone take the
                                                                                   steering wheel, and even then she is throwing
                                                                                                   orders around mercilessly.

sʜᴀᴅ ⋆ ᴅᴀɴᴅᴇʟɪᴏɴ ᴀɴᴅ ʙᴜʀᴅᴏᴄᴋ wrote: "What do you mean? Like, it's not centered?
Yep, that's what I thought.
'I' is the omniscient narrator"

Aye, the name starts a little after the first pic and carries on after the edge of the last pic? Though maybe this might be a problem of us having different computers...
Yeah, gotcha.
Def about to post a chara.

Mmm yeah I wasn't sure about the vibe it was giving off tbh. I'm probably going to edit that a bit.
Or make a different character the murderous one. idk.
But thanksies.

... (view spoiler)[ It's mainly the writing that's bothering me.... It feels too factual, too forced? Idk, maybe it's just me. Also experimenting in b&w, input on that? (hide spoiler)]

note : (view spoiler)[ template inspired by fiend, jenna, and bree. character belongs to me. (hide spoiler)]

 ❝ she'd burn out before I wake and be replaced ────────────────

    [ v ] ᴇsᴘᴇʀ ʟᴇɴᴀ ᴅᴏʙʀᴀᴠᴋᴀ ▫ ▪ ▫ philosophy and ethics × 26 × felicity jones

There's a reason Vesper teaches Philosophy and Ethics and not, for example, British Literature, though she would be just as adept. There's a reason that although she dresses like business casual round the clock, although she's smart enough to be a politician, although her father could have easily boosted her into the scene, she's not. For every piece of legislation or draft her father passed, Vesper knew how much underground dealing went on, she knew that money changed hands multiple times, she knew that although it claimed to be for the people, this world of politics was corrupt. It stank to the core. Vesper was born and raised and lived in this world, where from day one she was a poster child to help her father's campaign. The things she heard that she wasn't supposed to hear, the dealings she witnessed that she was too young, too naive to understand then - she definitely understands them now. That was why she left. That's why she's stuck in this hellhole of rich, bratty kids that don't want to learn, that don't want to better themselves, that don't want to do the right thing.

Vesper feels like she's fighting a losing battle against the next generation, against the world, against herself. These kids, sons and daughters of actors, politicians, and trust fund babies, won't be any better than the parents that raised them, try as Vesper might to instill some sense of right and wrong and morality in their closed-off, thick skulls. Her methods of teaching are unconventional and interactive; her classes are based on discussion and critical thinking - something that the world seems to lack. Those that want to learn, will learn. But outside the classroom, this fiery will to leave some sort of mark on these brats all but disappears. Apathy closes off her mind, her face. Some know whose daughter Vesper is - and all know who he is. But she doesn't want to have anything to do with him. She has a few casual friends among the staff at Beaumont, but Vesper is mainly a solitary creature. Most respect that and don't pry.

But, of course, there has to be some sort of complication. For Vesper, it's [Bree's chara], the World History teacher. With whom all the students, for some inexplicable reason, "ship" Vesper. It doesn't help that he's charming (? - change adj if needed) and unfairly good-looking (not that Vesper would ever admit it). But she's just not interested. She might have the time for some romance, but she doesn't want it. Vesper's cold, apathetic, always-there gaze seems to quiet a majority of rumours and gossip about her - but it seems there is no stopping this one, unfortunately.

 ────────────── by pints of whiskey, cigarettes, and outer space ❞

sʜᴀᴅ ⋆ ᴅᴀɴᴅᴇʟɪᴏɴ ᴀɴᴅ ʙᴜʀᴅᴏᴄᴋ wrote: "Rina:
a) The b&w definitely works! However, one of the gifs aren't very good quality and it's kind of pissing me off, sorry. :)
b) I think the writing definitely works! It doesn't seem too factual ..."

Fanksss, bae <3
Yeah, I know about the gif, but I couldn't find any other one that looked like I wanted it to, you know? (view spoiler)[ is this one better? (hide spoiler)]
Alright, yeah, I get what you're saying. ^-^