Creative Reviews discussion

Hello hello everyone! I wrote this short novella entitled Lucifer. It's the first in my Sons of Old Trilogy centered around Lucifer's fall from Heaven. I plan on turning it into an actual full fleged novel. Haven't decided yet. I haven't had type to edit the book yet either but am hoping to get to it by July.

I'm not exactly looking for reviews. More for feedback on the story and plot and characters. Suggestions as to what you think needs to be added or changed or rewritten. Since I plan on rewriting the novella and possibly turning it into a bigger novel, I can use feedback outside of myself lol.

Here's the blurb:

“I have existed long before God breathed life into the Earth. When Heaven was all there was. I have gone by many names. The story changes throughout the generations of the humans. But the one aspect of the story that always remains true is the battle. Yes, there was a great battle and I plan on creating that battle again. This time though, I will be the victor.”

Lucifer has waited in the darkness, patiently, his thirst for vengeance never quenching. He enters the human world through a vessel, sixteen year old, Bryan Hamilton. His plan ready to be acted upon, he meets Zahara Farraday. She is young, fierce, stubborn, and loyal. To Lucifer’s surprise he finds himself drawn to her and feelings he had never experienced before begin to rise. At first, Zahara denies her feelings for Lucifer, not knowing what he truly is but knowing there is something not quite right about him. Soon, Zahara is thrown full force into a world she had only ever read in folklore when her best friend Becca, is kidnapped by a coven of vampires. She can no longer deny the truth of what Lucifer is. Now, Zahara must decide what she is willing to believe and where her heart really lies. Can she really be in love with the angel of all evil? Would she be a fool to trust him? What’s the price she will have to pay if she does?

You can find the book on my website: http://nerdom.webs.com/apps/blog/cate...

Or I can email it you. I will be taking it down from the website soon.

Well, I must say that I like what I see - I do so hope you'll finish this! I do editing, so if you would like some editorial-type feedback (or editing services in general), please feel free to contact me - I barter for my services, so should be able to make it affordable for you. You can contact me through a PM or directly at my gmail.com account, which e-dress is katy.sozaeva (at) gmail.com

I'll hope to hear from you!