Time Travel discussion

Hey readers! I'm actually write short stories. I wrote a story about a man faced with killing his future murderer; however, the killer is still a child. Check it out and "like" me on Facebook please: http://brandonslist.blogspot.com/2012...

The story was OK, and the ending was good, but I'd suggest another round or two of proofreading and editing.

Thanks for the feedback.

That was pretty good. I like the ending. Agree with Randy on the proofreading, particularly with the dialogue structure, its confusing. Otherwise, well done.

And welcome to the group, hope you get some time to enjoy it if you like the time travel genre.

I thought the story was great! Unpredictable. I am interested in more! I agree that the dialogue was confusing and I am not sure who was speaking the last line. I think there is a clever statement being made but I am not sure I get it!!

Debbie wrote: "I thought the story was great! Unpredictable. I am interested in more! I agree that the dialogue was confusing and I am not sure who was speaking the last line. I think there is a clever
statemen..."


Thanks! The last line was said by the other man dragging the body, and it means bad things don't choice who they happen to. If you want more like my page: facebook.com/brandonjtuckerart