This is a little short story of about 2000 words that I wrote a few years back. My writing style has improved a great deal since then, but I've always liked this one. It's based on a real local legend they tell down in Key West. The story haunted me from the first time I heard it and I knew right away it would make great horror.
Anyway, I'd like to hear your feedback on this. I was thinking of including it in a short story collection I'm working on, but I'd like to know if you think I should make it longer by maybe adding to it. One thing I've always considered is maybe adding a modern twist to it, like maybe a ghost hunter finding out about the legend and going to investigate or something like that. I dunno.
This is a little short story of about 2000 words that I wrote a few years back. My writing style has improved a great deal since then, but I've always liked this one. It's based on a real local legend they tell down in Key West. The story haunted me from the first time I heard it and I knew right away it would make great horror.
Anyway, I'd like to hear your feedback on this. I was thinking of including it in a short story collection I'm working on, but I'd like to know if you think I should make it longer by maybe adding to it. One thing I've always considered is maybe adding a modern twist to it, like maybe a ghost hunter finding out about the legend and going to investigate or something like that. I dunno.
Let me know what you think.
Thanks!
-Ben
Chameleon
P.S. Feel free to look around my website if you really want to, but understand that I'm still building it so there isn't much there.