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Tada!


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Hi, so did you have any ideas?


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments yeah one it isnt fully devoloped


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Alright, I'm open to it! What's it about?


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments ok so this girl has a bad family problems and gets disowned from her family and she goes to live with her grandma and her grandmas friend then she meets a guy who is the son of a famous guy.

This can be paranormal or realistic


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So is it okay if I put my ideas on this plot? I have some ideas of how to fill it in better. But it's up to you,


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments Yeah its fine is it ok and can i be the girl cause i have a ruff idea for her.


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Sure that's fine!

Anyway, i thought that the girl moves in with just her grandma who is really strict and unfortunately isn't a huge fan of her granddaughter either. And the community that her grandmother lives in is one of those very rich class type communities, (a big jump from her past life with her middle class family). The grandmother finds her to be an embarrassment and forbids that she talk to any of their other neighbors. But as the granddaughter is out running an errand for her grandma, she meets one of the top richest people in the neighborhood. And unlike the rest of the rich snobs, he's actually pretty sweet (I'm thinking, however, that he be kind of a jerk to her in the beginning)


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And if you wanted a fictional twist, then the reason her family and grandmother hate her is because she's some sort of mutant/vampire, whatever you want. And she feels alone until she discovers that the only reason the boy likes her is because he too has the same power and is keeping it a secret.


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onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments That would be perfect because her regular family doesnt like her and her grandmother doesnt. This a really good add on. should we do simple characters or just start. I have to go soon and i will be back on at 9:00 p.m eastern hopefully and also i wont be that active until July. realistic would be perfect.


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Alright, and same here, I'll be more dedicated to coming on in July.

And I'm glad you liked it. If we are to make character bios, how about we just do appearance, age, and name.


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments Ok um i have to go now. So ill post at 9:00


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Alright! I may be on.


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Rigby wrote: "So is it okay if I put my ideas on this plot? I have some ideas of how to fill it in better. But it's up to you,"

I decided to make some character bios (Some are just ideas, the boy is my official character though)

Name: John McAvoy
Age:18
Appearance:http://i260.photobucket.com/albums/ii...

(Now these are just possibilities, which you can change if you'd like, and I don't know who's playing who, or if these won't even be in the roleplay)

Name: Judith (Girl's grandmother)
Age: 72
Appearance: http://images.tvrage.com/screencaps/1...

Name: Renae McAvoy (John's mother)
Age:43
Appearance:http://www.treksinscifi.com/babedaily...

Name: Richard McAvoy
Age: 45
Appearance: http://images.fandango.com/r86.6.2/Im...

(I'm not sur if these characters are even going to be used, but idk, I felt like making them too. If you don't like their appearance or something, you can change it!)


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments Ok i'm not picky about the pics.

Name: Elaine Harrison
Age: 17
Appearance: Blonde hair, blue eyes, tan


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Okay cool! So are those characters even needed? And if so would I be playing any?


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments Maybe the grandma but its up to you because they could just be minor characters.


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Alright. Shall we start? And can you start it off?


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments Yes and no im busy doing something for my parents they dont know how to use the computer.


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Alright, I'll start.

Grandma Judith angrily peaked through her window curtains. A car pulled up along her curb and a young woman came out carrying what looked to be everything she owned. Grandma snarled, she hated the neighbors to be able to see this, what would they think!?

"Ramona! Ramona! GO open the door and quickly help that girl with her luggage, I don't need to attract a crowd!"

"Yes ma'am," replied Ramona her maid.

Ramona quickly answered the door, flying past Elaine and finishing off what luggage was left in the car.
THe driver of the car nodded to the maid and took off back to the busy street.


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments Elaine saw the different houses as she passed them. She was scared. She knew no one wanted her. She tried to hide the pain of being not wanted. She took a shaky breath as she knew she was coming up to her grandmothers house. She looked down some knowing they hate her. She thought about cutting or killing herself but it wasnt worth it.

She came to the drive way. She saw her maid. She gulped as he took her bags. She walked out of the car. "Hi." She whispered to the maid.


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The maid quickly turned around, giving Elaine a small curtsy, as she ran into the house. Grandma stood inside, waiting to greet Elaine. As Elaine walked slowly inside, maid closed the door and lead Elaine inside Grandma's office.

"Elaine's here ma'am,"

"Yes,... you may leave now Ramona."

Ramona ran out quickly, closing the doors behind her, leaving the two inside the room.

"So, Elaine. You're pathetic family dumps you on my porch. And expects me to put up with a misfit like you. Hmm. Well let me state some rules before you get comfortable. There will be no talking to any of my guests, neighbors, for any reason. Second, you are to attend school, only for it's educational purposes. Your new uniforms are in your closet. Thirdly, you will respect my authority."


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments She smiled softly at the maid. She walked in slowly in the house. She was trying so hard to be brave buts it is hard to be brave when everyone is against you. She saw her grandma in their. She perked her head up to listen. When she started to talk about how she is a misfit and how no one wants her. She listened carefully. She guessed she wouldn't have a social life its not like she has one. She wasn't allowed to speak to anyone. She nodded her head showing that she understood her grandmas rules.


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"Good. Now, you're room is upstairs, first door on the left. Your baggage and other belongings are up there waiting. As Elaine walked out, the maid awaited her on the other side. "Dinner will be at 5:30 ma'am."

Up the floral carpeted stairs was more floral carpet. Once in her room was a huge pillowed bed, a desk, a four door closet, a nightstand, and one large square window with a seat underneath it. The curtains were open, and the view was rather lovely. And it was a perfect view of the neighbor's property. Which belonged to the McAvoy's.


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments She nodded her head went upstairs to her new room. She took a deep breath. She saw the neighbors. She wonder if there was any cute boys but she wasn't allowed to talk to them. She was going to kill herself maybe. She just wanted to belong. She stopped trying to hold in the tears. She was failure for people. She was disowned by her family. Maybe she could meet someone new without her grandma founding out but then she could be out of house. She sighed and curled in a ball on her bed.


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Outside sat a young man of 18. His name was John, and he'd just return home from school, still in his uniform. A cool breeze blew through his backyard. He rubbed his eyes, sore from the constant studying he'd been doing. His father urged him to succeed, to get into college, to marry a smart woman, to make something of yourself!! Leaning back on the bench, he let out a deep sigh. Looking over toward his neighbor's house, he noticed on of the window's were actually open. Squinting his eyes more to see further. He didn't see anyone, so he leaned his had back again and shut his tired eyes.


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments She peeked out the window hearing a noise. She saw this guy sitting on a bench. she wasn't allowed to talk to him. He was cute too. She sighed some he was probably taken by a cheerleader. She was smarter than some people but she didnt take peoples crap. All she wanted to be was wanted. So she did music that made her feel like she belong other than that nothing else completed her like music did. She was happy to a extent to be out of her house. She always was treated like crap.


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Opening his eyes again, he began staring at the tall oak tree above him. It's leaves were a bright green. As he followed the long branches, again his eyes went to the neighbor's window. This time, however, he found a face. Rising up he smiled, and gave a small wave to the new face.


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments She smiled at the guy. She waved back. Her grandma said she couldn't talk not wave. She guessed she would see him at school. He was cute. She backed away not wanting to get into trouble by her grandma. she was scared she wouldn't get to do anything. She was scared of being kicked out of this house. She decided not to dwell on things she couldn't dwell on anything that could affect her life. She had to stay positive.


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A knock came at her door, "Ma'am, it's supper time." The maid walked over toward the curtains, "Would you like these closed ma'am?"

Outside, John sat and watched as the girl disappeared. He found it weird to see a young girl in the crazy old woman's house. He wondered who she could be. As far as he knew, the old woman had no kids.


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments She nodded her head. "Yes please and im not hungry and if i were to eat could i eat in my room?" She whispered softly. She didn't want it close but she agreed trying not to cause any trouble.

((sorry its short gtg will reply in the morning.))


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"Um, the madam would prefer you eat in the dining room," she paused getting closer and whispered, "I'd tell her you're studying, she eats while she's in her office, so if you're studying, I wouldn't see why not ma'am."

(It's fine, I'll be on tomorrow ~sometime, not sure when)


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments "Thank you." She whispered. She was tired and sad. She just wanted to fit in somewhere. She looked down some trying not to make contact. Her heart was shattered some.


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As Grandma sat down at her fresh dinner before her, she noticed her granddaughter hadn't come down yet. "ROMONA! Bring Elaine down please. This dinner was prepared for her, and I think some gratitude is in order. After all, I have let her into my home!"


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments Her heart broke. She did't want to go down there."Its ok i'll go down there." She whispered. She got up and walked slowly down the steps. She walked into the dinning room. "Thank you." She said.


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"Sit! Sit!" she demanded. As the girl sat down, she began, "Now. Today being Sunday means that you will have school tomorrow. I've decided to push you right in. Now unlike your old peasant school, this school actually requires a focused attitude, a respect for cleanliness and a passion to learn. Now as I said, your uniforms are in the closet, and you must keep these clean and pressed, Ramona will keep them this way if you do your part putting them away. Our driver will take you tomorrow morning at 7:30. You must be clean and ready before then. Now, lets have our dinner!"


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments She nodded her head understanding completely. She did not want to get on her bad side. She was so demanding. She will get to see that cute guy. "Yes ma'ma." She said looking up hoping she would get that she understood. The thought of that cute guy crossed her head so many times. "Will my classes be the same or will i have higher classes?" She wanted higher classes because she was smarter than everyone at her old school.


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"Well since you are from my family line, sadly, I have chosen to place you in a higher class. Though if you should fail, you shall suffer the consequences." Her grandma proceeded to eat her peas and tap her mouth with her napkin before speaking, "If anyone should ask where you live, say you are a foreign exchange student, or anything. I don't need the neighbors asking why I have a girl in her teenage state living here."


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments She was glad that she got higher classes. She took a bite of food. She heard that she was ashamed of her being her. She nodded her head. She only had to stay here until she graduates and gets a full scholarship. She swallowed the food. "Colleges like extra curricular.Will i be able to do any of them."


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Her Grandma peered up from her plate. "You know you're family underestimates you. Saying you have no interest in all his education. Here, I'll make you a deal. You stay dedicated to your classes, and I will donate a sum toward this college fund for you. But no more gifts from me, I've given you a roof above your head."


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments She nodded her head. She didn't get no nor did she get a yes. She had to at least do one sport to get into a college. She had many open ideas to where she wanted to go. She understood that no one wanted her. She knew she was shameful to her family or that's what she was told. She finish her meal in silence. "Thank you for the meal." She said.


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"You may go back to your room," her grandma got up from her seat and walked back into her study. Ramona picked up the plates along with another maid. Ramona smiled at Elaine, "Don't worry miss, this is actually one of her good days. And your grandma does mean well. She is like this with anyone."


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments "Its ok I'm use to people treating me this way." She whispered and walked up to her room. She had her head down. Tears swiftly down. She knew things had to get better. She set an alarm on the clock for six. She closed her eyes letting the tears come faster as she fell asleep.

((Do you want to skip to morning or school?))


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(School)

John yelled to his mom, "I'm leaving!" His mom yelled back as he walked outside. As he threw in his backpack into his car, he noticed the girl from yesterday, walking into the old lady's car, along with the driver. Her long blonde hair sat perfectly on her shoulders and flowed gently as she walked. John smiled and got into his car.


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments She got in the car. She looked over her shoulder to see that guy. She will get to see him at school. She didn't like the skirt that was finger tip length nor didn't she like the shirt. She tried to look her best. She thought she looked great everything was perfect hopefully. She watch her surroundings change as she arrived at the school.


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(Should we skip to breaks? or do the classes?)


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments ((Maybe they meet each other in the hall way or have the same class together))


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(Alright)

As John looked at the lockers he passed as he walked through the halls, up in front of him was a familiar face. Still, her hair, long and blonde, sat upon her shoulder. John smiled and decided to approach her. Giving her a light tap on her shoulder he said, "Hello."


onceuponatimeareview | 5047 comments She turned around to see the guy who was her neighbor. She smiled some. "Hello." Figuring hi or hey wouldn't be right for this school. She had a sweet smile. Her blond hair was perfect on her.


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