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He stretched his mind; finally he feels the sun warming the side of her face. "I wish I could reach out and touch her, feel her soft skin."
The portion in the quotes would the italicized without the quotes as internal dialogue. When you add Wayne wished, it isn't dialogue, is it tell the reader what he thought.
I agree with Michael and B.A. What you quoted were not his thoughts, but the narrator telling us what he's thinking. If you were to show his actual thoughts, italics would be enough. The asterisks are overkill.
Example; the MC has mentally connected to his girlfriend; he feels her worry and anguish for him.
'He stretched his mind; finally, he feels the sun warming the side of her face. Wayne wished that in these visions, he could reach out and touch her, feel her soft skin.'
What is your Vote?
A - standard text with the paragraph separated by asterisks. (***)
B- italicized text with the paragraph separated by asterisks. (***)
C- you suggest how it should appear!
I'm in editing mode; it's effortless to make a change that works best for readers!